Schitzo - Comments

This is an interesting and unique read; it's not like anything I have read on here, and I mean that in the best way possible: Uniqueness is good on here! :-D

This was VERY good and I deeply enjoyed it. Fantastic job! It also sparks thought for readers, and that is a valuable skill for a writer to have.

And I must mention that the way you mentioned you came up with this sounds really cool. I think I may have to try something like that.

There was something really, very interesting about this story. It did not have the seriousness that a lot of these stories have, but it was still not making fun of the mental disease at all. I thought it brought up a good point of the way we judge people. A lot of people make guesses about mental disease in people that they see, and, it's true, most of the time they're wrong. But, just because a majority of the time it's wrong, is that a reason to write it off without investigating?

I'd say that's probably a pretty debatable subject.

Good job.

This was really, really interesting and yes, like you said, a little controversial, though I’m by no means judging I write plenty of controversial things myself. You wrote this wish such an amazing tone and dialect. I loved your narrator character, they seemed so sarcastic and I loved how they went over each little situation and how the other person would justify it. I assume that you weren’t going for this but the narrator seemed a little crazy to me themselves, like they were about to go defend themselves to someone and they were going over all the possible ways the conversation could go or something along those lines...anyways, this is really great and original and I absolutely enjoyed reading it, it just flowed perfectly and kept my attention the entire time – great work.

To be honest the title was what drew me in, I was curious why someone would name a story that

I'm kinda with Bella on this one, the picture kinda threw me off but I liked the layout, it was simple and readable but it still looked good.

I'm also with Bella when it comes to the first line, that first comma it does kinda disrupt the flow of the sentance.

I thought the story itself was really good, I couldn't read it fast enought, I was hooked on it after the first few sentances. You kept it really realistic throughout the story which was really good.

I believe that this is a very controversial topic but I think the way you wrote this was extremely well.

I liked the layout. It was simple and made the story easy to read :)
As for the story itself, it was brilliant. I always love everything you post :3 Everything you write is so intriguing.
...Including this story, of course. I couldn't take my eyes off the monitor. You got me hooked into the story in just a few words.
Very good job, I loved this!

This is really good :D It's interesting and keeps the reader going. Also, I think you wrote "schitzo" wrong. I think it's supposed to be schizo (:
Other than that, great job! <3

The layout is simple, but a nice simple. The picture kind of put me off, but that's really not that important.

acused- accused.

There's one part where you mix the main character's dialogue with the kid's, I think you should break that up.

You kept a serious tone in the entire story, which I like. It really makes you feel bad for the boy. I talk to myself a lot, but that's a different thing entirely. It's really different, I haven't seen a story like this before.

Yeah, though, it would've been cool if she was the schitzo person.
:)

I'm really glad I read this! :)
It's so interesting, I really like it.

The last line on the first paragraph made me laugh a bit xD
But the rest was very serious and the emotions were amazing.

I agree with Bella about the main person to actually be that schitzo person you were talking about.
That would have made that bit more interesting.

And I also agree with her on the fact that he could have had something else wrong with him, not just shitzo. If you wanted to potray that he had shitzo you should maybe look up more things that they do and add them in to make it more realistic.

But overall, lovely job. <3 I quite enjoyed it.

This was a really different story to read.
It definitely kept my attention the whole time and it kept me interested.
I wasn't that fond of the banner, I feel like I've seen that picture way to many times.

All in all I thought it was an enjoyable read, great job.

Layout: I didn't like the banner, it made me think of people laughing. I mean, to me it didn't look like they were shouting, but laughing. x]

If in all seriousness, I call a kid “schitzo”, would you judge me?
The first comma sort of disrupts the flow - at least to me.

I liked the theme of the story, and it's a very interesting idea. But I'm afraid, I, as the reader, would agree that he's schitzo. There's so many other things that could be wrong with the boy in the story - or not wrong at all. Jumping to schitzo isn't the first place I'd go. But I understand where you're coming from, I just can't agree with the final moments of the story.

Oh and I would've loved it if the main person stood up in the end, and that it was made clear that there was no one there with her - giving the allusion that maybe she's the one who's talking to herself and reasoning with herself.

Overall you used the language perfectly, and the tone was enough to keep me curious the entire time. The summary was a bit too short for my likening, as usually I don't read stories with just one sentence for a summary. The flow was great, except in that one place I pointed out, and it's clear you do know how to write. Really good.

This was an interesting read. :)
The layout was pretty cute and the detail you expressed in this was amazing.<3
I did enjoy reading this. C:

It took me two reads to keep up with everything though, aha. Your writing flowed and everything, I just think my brain's not really with me today, aha. ><

Good Job. C:

This was very eye-opening and amazing.
It was written extremely well and the layout is easy on the eyes.
You wrote with a lot of detail.
I loved it!!!

I'm actually going to be doing a speech and 5,000 word esay on Schizophrenia. I've been doing a lot of research on it and it's quite clear that people don't know the extent of what symptoms people get when they're Schizophrenic. Of course there are hallucinations and delusions, those are the typical symptoms, but then there's apathy and becoming a sociopath, there's so much more to Schizophrenia than simply talking to hallucinations.
I feel that what you wrote is a clear interpretation of what the world see's when looking at a Schizophrenic, it was clearly put and although could seem a bit harsh shows the true esscence of human emotions towards people with mental illnesses such as Schizophrenia. I apologize if I seem rash in my jugement or over the top, I want to be a Psychiatrist, therefore I really should be thinking in such terms. It was an interesting read though :)

It's very original and interesting. You never cease to amaze me. This is definitely controvertial but I enjoyed the way you dealt with it. The banner and layout is delightful and non-distracting, making everything easier to read. I hope you never stop writing.

Wow, I actually really loved this. It's something different, but yet written incredibly well.

Clarity: 98%
Believability: 95%
Characterization: 90%
Description: 90%
Dialog: 95%
Emotional Engagement: 99%
Grammar/Spelling: 99%
Imagery: 98%
Intellectual Engagement: 97%
Pacing: 99%
Plot: 99%
Readability: 99%

i am utterly amazed. at you, at the story. i just love how you have the ability, in this story and others, to take situations like this, that you just conjured up, yet that could somehow happen, and give them finesse and give them a beauty. i'm serious, cat. you're pro. and i love you for that. xoxo

This is so interesting, and very different from most things you'd find on Mibba. You can tell a lot about the character just by seeing this part of her mind. It's interesting how the power of observation can compell you...

The title reminds me of Zombies. v.v I dunno why, but it's good, either way! :D

The layout could be really amazing if the story area was as big as the picture, so it balances out. But I like everything else, and the colors are pretty. C:

The summary makes me think. I like it.

If I, would you? Okay. v.v So that's what Schitzo is/ is short for. -cough cough- I feel like a bitch now. ):
Gah. This was amazing, though. You're a great writer. Honestly. <3

You have so much talent, m'dear.
This was so original & I loved it.
You definitely kept me interested the whole time. [:

Just one thing:
You would probably say something like “You know, there are a lot of people out there who really have schizophrenia, and they don’t think it’s very funny.”

I'm pretty sure that there should be a comma after like.

Besides that - this was brilliant!

Wonderful job! [:

Alright, I love it. Just amazing. <3