Between Black and White - Comments

I am one of the judges for Clark Kent;;'s contest. Since I live in Ohio and very close to Pennsylvania I have seen the Amish people. You did a really good job at this :). The beginning of your sentences could maybe not repeat so much along with some other words like the word gray. You can try using the word slate or charcoal to describe the color. Other than that, I really really enjoyed this. Your themes were used amazingly :). By far my favorite :)).

I really liked this actually, I thought you used the idea of the Amish Community very well and that tied in quite well with the themes you were given. I loved the idea of her realizing maybe everyone wasn't evil in the contemporary world.

Your spelling and grammar was pretty good, I only noticed a few mistakes. For example you said "I laid back in the grass.." - you would say lay back instead of laid.
And also thwapping was an interesting way to describe the noise, though it left me a little confused for a second.

Overall, very, very, well done! I liked this a lot! Plus your layout is really nice and neat :)
Good work and good luck!!