Very interesting story you've got here. I've never read any of the books, but I did see the movie... But that was still quite a while ago... Alright, criticism time! I did notice a couple of spelling and grammatical errors here and there, but it was relatively clear of them (I'm just really good at spotting them). You have a pretty nice flow to your story. I did enjoy it, though it was very fast paced and jumped right into it. You should have maybe had a chapter before this, just to allow for some back ground details and such, but this is your story, so that's all up to you. I did notice that this was updated over two years ago.... So I'm guessing that it's not being continued, which is sad, because you had a nice story started here. Hope that you are still writing because I wish you the best in your future stories :)
Alright, criticism time! I did notice a couple of spelling and grammatical errors here and there, but it was relatively clear of them (I'm just really good at spotting them). You have a pretty nice flow to your story. I did enjoy it, though it was very fast paced and jumped right into it. You should have maybe had a chapter before this, just to allow for some back ground details and such, but this is your story, so that's all up to you.
I did notice that this was updated over two years ago.... So I'm guessing that it's not being continued, which is sad, because you had a nice story started here. Hope that you are still writing because I wish you the best in your future stories :)