Stitched In Memories - Comments

I loved this.
I also need to tell you,
I lost my phone at Raider's Camp.
So, if you wanna talk until I get a new one:
(304)-888-3156.
Also, I'm suspended for calling my French teacher a bitch.
Hahaha.
I miss you.

First of all, let me apologize for not reviewing your entry sooner.
Life just gets a little out of hand sometimes, no?
Thank you so much for getting your entry completed in time.
It's really appreciated by both Lili and I, and it shows your dedication as a writer.
Thank you. (:

First of all, I must say that I adore the layout and the picture you chose. Especially the photo.
Perfect job there, and nice showmanship. I loved how the sweater the boy in the photo was wearing was just like the one I pictured Robert to be wearing at that carnival. The layout was nice and simple, clean cut and not too showy. It also fit the tone of the story well. (:

I knew that you could write, but I have to admit that I was very pleased to read this entry. You managed to create a perfectly rounded and well summed up story in just 1,000 something words. A lot of the time, authors tend to cut things off too soon or jumble too much together right near the ending. You executed a very well rounded and completed ending.

The story had just the right mix of happiness and sadness. I'm a sucker for a sad story, but I do admit to liking fluffy things as well. I liked how balanced this story was. The characters seemed very real to me, and the story line was easy to relate to and to comprehend. I was expecting to receive an entry full of angst, something cheesy, and along the lines of someone's lover dying. I really enjoyed how you took a different approach to this, and simply wrote about what happens all of the time within relationships, whether they be gay or straight. I quite enjoyed the sense of realism, and how you included the element of how homosexual relationships are just like hetersexual ones. (:

I didn't notice any spelling or grammar issues within this, so thank you for proof reading and taking the time to write everything out clearly. That is always greatly appreciated. (:

Your descriptions are just lovely, and they flow so well.
The way you used your secret was just adorable, and cute.
I very much liked it.
I think this was my favorite line:
"Every stitch, every fiber, brought back all those fond memories and images. With every brush against it, the material released a special tainted scent and thought to flood the space around me mentally."

That was a wonderful way of revealing your secret, as well as illuminating your ability to describe vividly. (:

All in all,
I really liked this entry.
Well done. (:

Thank you for entering our contest,
and good luck! <3

Thank you so much for entering the contest and getting your entry in on time! It's much appreciated.

I found this entry to be completely adorable. You told their story so delicately and the way that the title of the story came from both your secret and the story itself was beautiful. It fit the story and the secret perfectly. The banner was adorable too, tying in with the story as well. Your layout was definitely pleasing to the eye, not too crazy like some layout's are on mibba these days. Your grammar was good too, which is always good in my book.

I loved how you had craftily associated so many memories with the old worn out sweater in an entry that doesn't even break 2,000 words. You showed how Robert had hated the sweat when he bought it, but learned to love it to the point that he wore nothing else, even associating it with when they had showed each other how much they loved each other - a memory that should never be forgotten, in my opinion. I think the fact that he stole it after all of that went down was absolutely perfect. The simply way that you combined past and present into the same story was simply superb.

I liked how you basically had your character realize that Robert was his first and only love, and eventually he'll stop needing to dig out that sweater because he'll move on to bigger and better things like Robert did. He'll never forget Robert though because it's impossible to forget your first love. The sweater will always be important for him though.

I must say that I was pleasant surprised reading this. I expected a cliche story where the boy either died or they were so crazy about each other that he was bordering on obsessive, but you gave me something unique and special. Amazing job.

Thank you for entering and keep up the writing. You have such great skill at telling a story. (:

Wow, this was Lovely :)