Hold Your Breath - Comments

"You've Already Written It" Prewrite Contest:

Layout: Paramore is my *favorite* band, so I lovvvvveeed the layout. :P

Content: I think this story matched the song perfectly. I love how Ava wrote to Noah, and at the end how you tease that Noah just *might* change, until Lana calls. That was really good, and I really liked this story.

Overall: Loved it! :P
P.S. I have a Paramore Songfic Contest (link in sig), if you want to enter this and a new one. :P

Your description was wonderful and I loved how you started off and ended. It was perfect timing. I liked the letters a lot. It was mad clear that she missed him but wouldn't take him back and I liked that he didn't go after her. It was realistic that way. I wouldn't have enjoyed it as much if you made her take him back. Also I liked how Noah wasn't really distraught by Ava leaving, because I don't think a cheater would really. The new girl at the end emphasized that and I really liked it. Great wording and description, I really liked this story.

This was just flat out brilliant. I absolutely loved it, especially the ending. I liked how you provided an adequate background for both Ava and Noah and how the characters were believable. I liked that you didn't include Mary Sue characters. I liked how you portrayed them. By the way, I also adore the layout.

Thanks for entering my contest and I wish you the best of luck. :)

Update soooooooon. Loving it. I've already read it but it's still great.

I feel so sorry for Ava =( bless her. Noah's an arse.

Thanks for the shoutout love =) xx