Wow. That was adorably sweet and terribly sad! You kept it really simple and to the point, sticking thickly with your theme of the stars- which was brilliant, by the way. It was really sweet and and I was just crushed upon finding out he left. Horrible! But the metaphoric words were brilliant. The only thing I might change, is maybe some more emotions and details to the reactions, maybe. It really didn't need much more, honestly. There was the dialogue and then the last few words. I don't know what exactly you'd put in, but I felt like it lacked a little bit of humanity, if that makes any sense. But it was still great :) 89/100
The only thing I might change, is maybe some more emotions and details to the reactions, maybe. It really didn't need much more, honestly. There was the dialogue and then the last few words. I don't know what exactly you'd put in, but I felt like it lacked a little bit of humanity, if that makes any sense. But it was still great :)
89/100