An Hour of Turbulence - Comments

Your research paid off because this was an excellent story. I absolutely loved the names though, they were fun to try and say. And your flow of writing is nice, there is nothing awkward or choppy. It is obvious you put effort into this short story and I definetly enjoyed reading it.

Where do you manage to get all those amazing banners? D;

What she even doing, teaching this material?
That seems to be the only mistake I have encountered. Should it be ..What was she even doing...

I don't know who the characters are, from what band that is and actually, I'm assuming this is a fanfiction. I liked it. It was quite simple and to the point. I got confused with the characters, seeing as how they were all introduced in one. I had to reread that but I managed to understand it.

The detail was good, I liked Yuki's slightly naive attitude. And the way the girl's talked reminded me of a manga, seeing as how they are showed to be that way, affected by everything a boy does; even if it is a simple smile. Boys are humans too -.- His love for playin guitar shone through and that seems to be your main point in this story. Ryoichi reminds me of Naruto for some reason. Must be the blond hair though.

Nicely done! Can't wait for more. :D

This is amazing; a lot of research and hard work went into you could see within the first paragraph.

I must say the layout is beautiful :]
I honestly think this is the first story I enjoyed that isn't romance :]]

So I seriously loved this.

It was interesting, and not a romance (which is something hard to find) and I enjoyed reading it.

You're a really good writer. ::D

I thought this was awesome. Everyone pretty much summed up what I wanted to say though D:
Hmm... I liked everything about this. Yuki sounds like a cool person!
I've heard of X-Japan but I've never actually listened to them, but I might listen to a few songs. This has inspired me! xD

I felt like this was really choppy for a short story. Usually in stories this short the author tends to stick to one idea, and you are all over the place. You're a good writer, but this was really hard to get a sense of.

You made it very relatable with the whole math thing. There are so many people out there who have issues with their school work, especially math, and I applaud you for reaching out to them.

You really captured brotherly love, and that was sweet.

This was really a great story and I enjoyed reading it!

I loved reading this. The fact that you used research shows the effort and time you took to write this and that made it entirely more wonderful. Being a guitar player myself, I enjoyed how you wrote and described the guitars and the dedication of the characters to them. It was all very delicate.

"It became obvious to Yuki's family that something about the intricate rhythms and the pluck of the strings entranced him if it would put him peacefully to sleep."

The ending was brilliant, comical and the characters were well written with nice dynamics. Lovely<3

I liked this story a lot, especially the fact that you did look up background information to make the story more realistic.

Aw, I loved this story! I've never read anything like it before.
Your character development was nice, and so were all your details.
Yuki was a very cool person to read about.
The end confused me a little, 'cause I thought they'd gone to the music store to buy a guitar.
Other than that, it's perfect.

Good work :3
This is really good!

This was all very well written and entertaining.
Also like the other commenters above me have said, it's not about love which makes for a nice change.
I really liked the title too, it interested me from the start.

Great job! :D

Ha. This was fun. I hate to say this, but everyone else kinda summed it up. But I might also add that I liked the character's personalities because they really seemed like brothers. Good work :3

I'm glad you wanted me to read this. [: It's quite different from other stories on Mibba. It's not a typical romance - not that those are bad, aha. ;D
Yuki's character was very well-written - in fact, the whole entire piece was well-written.
You seriously have loads of talent, m'dear!
I loved everything about this. [:
The title also has something about it, that I like.
Wonderful job! [:

This was cute. :) I really enjoyed that it was about Yuki learning to play guitar and getting the money to buy his own guitar. This was very entertaining and quite well written. You for sure have a knack for writing. <3

I love this, I really do.
It was so awesome and amazngly written, well done!

Wow.
I really liked this. I'm glad it wasn't cliche or all about love; sometimes it's nice for a change.
I just couldn't pronounce any of the names, haha x3

Shed Your Yellow basically say everything that I wanted to, but anyways, I like Yuki. He reminds me of Yuki from Fruits Basket. He seems all quiet and cute :]
I have no idea who X-Japan is, but they seem really cool, haha!
Great job!

I like the unique names you used. And I love the plot. It's different, because it's not all about love, and it's not cliche.

The title is what drew me in, and from the first setence of the first chapter, I was basically hooked.

Love this!