The Other Side of the Door - Comments

I found this very hard to read with the lyrics in place, I'm not entirely sure you're allowed to do that and the layout wasn;t the best, especially with the banner! I couldn't read anything on it.
I thought it was very simple, and went with the lyrics well but a lot more description is needed to keep the reader gripped. I thought your colloquial language was good.

Okay, so wow. I really liked this because it you explained everything well and everything went with the lyrics, if you know what I mean. Other than that, I found that this was actually quite amazing and it made me want to read more. I loved how you told about how happy they were, and I loved the last line. I wish you could continue with this, though. :)

wow, that is a great story. I love how you added lyrics every line or so. Very cheesy love story-ish.