Natural Born Killer - Comments

I REALLY LIKE THIS STORY KEEP GOING

haha Egging

Great update i love this story so much and the whole egging the house thing i would love to help but i think we would never be found again after that night haha. So is the whole cop and number story true?

I wanna egg the A7x house! Pick me Pick me! My gooey egg splatters will spell the words 'I love you
'.... Too creepy? Lol I thought so. Anywho.. Looooved it =]

I love it!
Hurry up and update again soon?!

I jumped for joy when I saw you updated.
I loved the chapter. Please update soon.

lol i know for a fact he wont be home.... witch only makes it better cuz when he gets home (and im hoping vals spending some time with him) or when his parents stop by to make sure every things okay the egg will be dried.... lol and im not doing it just to make him or his wife pissed, its all in good fun.. im sure if he knew where i lived hed egg my house to... okay maybe not.but yeah the cop said matts a really mellow guy and verry respectful towards him.. but yeah the cop laughed when i said 'and im asuming if i ask where he lives you wont tell me' lol and he gave me a major clue.... so me and my friend drove off and searched... and i do belive we have found it,... i have a diff friend that went to synyster gates house for a autograph he said michelle answered and told him he had the wrong house... lol wich made us laugh cuz it was michelle..... but that was back when they had just finished touring for city of evil. lol and im not giving any addresses

yey you updated i wanna know whats gonna happen if she is really going to get an abortion.

do you really have matts adress.

i wouldn't egg his house if i were u, *im not trying to sound like a bitch* but idk he will even be there on halloween, kuz of him being on tour. but i love this story,so update soon! haha

Wow.. Reported for bad grammer? Fur cereal? The only miniscule mistakes is the Capitilization. No biggie, so w/e lol =] Well.. I love it =]

I always loved the first one and i really like the sequel its really living up to its potential.... sorry i am a lazy commenter, dont get discouraged i am so happy you updated i am totally doing like a happy dance hehe too bad it was so short. I cant believe she wished him away at the end like who would do that! LoL please update again? I love you I love this story I love Rory I love Shadows... is this enough love to make you update? hehe :D

you know i also hate people trying to report the real good stories because of envy dont listen to them i know some of the writters that left mibba becasue of that and their stories were great
dont listen to them.

Aww, Matt is such a sweetie! a vicious, murderous sweetie, but a sweetie :3

Matt is so not gonna stay away from Rory lol
or is he?... lol

i have a feeling Rory pregnancy will be a little rough without Matt
in the picture as much as i hate to admit it she does need him...

i cant wait to see what happens next! =)

This is a fantastic story and I really love the way you can get the reader to engage with it but I did notice some issues. You are a brilliant writer and I'm just posting this to help you improve.

Firstly the grammar needs work. The depth that this story can provide can be lost with grammatical issues.

Another issue is spelling mistakes. Instead of definitely you wrote "definably" and instead of inhale you wrote "in hale". These issues are minor but draw away from the story's impact.

I struggle with this next issue myself; paragraphing. A reader could potentially lose interest if the first thing they see are massive blocks of text so it helps greatly to use paragraphing whilst writing.

Lastly this is just a person opinion, I find Rory very intriguing but confusing as well. There isn't much explanation about how she can be so.... on/off with Matt. She goes through massive mood swings without any specific spark.

I hope you may take these minor issues under consideration as I can see you are already a brilliant writer but you a capable of being so much more wonderful with minor adjustments.

You've managed to already have so much interest into the sequel and have such an intriguing plot line that I find myself on the edge of my seat waiting for the next update.

If you would ever like a Beta to review and edit your chapters before you post them I would be more than honored to be considered.

You have a good story idea, thats why someone reported it.
I loved the conversation they had.
Please update soon.

I love this story!
I dont see anything wrong with this story.

i love ur story just the way it is, and i really liked the part where matt just disappears,lolz

ha, that thing that happened with zacky's brother is fucking hilarious, i woulda died laughing if i were there in person 2 c it,lmao

he finally apeared!!
you updated yay. :)
do you have photos of the concert, did you get to meet anyone of thier relatives??