Something Keeps Pulling Me Back - Comments

Ohhh ok then. Anywaaaaay....... I'm kinda glad Frankie did that because it'll show Gee he's much stronger now and won't let anyone step over him. Buuuuuuut...... I'm feel bad about Gee because he loves him ok. But he needs to get help about his anger issues.
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I'm trying to keep joel in past where he is in my notepad, but the real life 'Joel' hasnt given any inspiration to the story lately, hopefully I can just search my memory :)

I hope Frankie plays hard to get. Because Gee is jealous and only wants him because of that and cuz he thinks he needs him. Buuuuut when he sees that's not true he'll change and truly love and respect Frankie
Oh. And I hope Joel stays for some time too
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I loooooved it.
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I like the interplay of emotions between the characters shown in their actions in this one :)
Intriguing conflict.

I just read it and I love it. It's a greeeeeeat plot
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Awww... poor Frank, he needs help. Update soon please!! :D

Frank is falling for someone other than Gerard???

I don't know what advice to give you, except to leave a line break between your paragraphs. Indent doesn't work on Mibba. I find this story interesting and I don't have any criticism at the moment. Maybe sometimes it sounds immature or vague. Anyway, I like it.

Got any advice? I feel as though the last few chapters have been quite errh, shit tbh.
Can you help?

I like that last part about people thinking he's hard to get, but inside he's not. That was cute :P

I just got caught up again. Really cute chapter in there about Frank and Gerard when they were together.

Ray is such a weirdo, but in a good way :P

Haha yeah rays gonna be that awesome character everyone loves, he's based on one of my besti friends Rachel, who oddly enough we call Ray lol. I love all your comments btw, its whats keeping me on this story lol.

Oh, and I noticed the "Don't tell Gerard" thing and it made me giggle. He's anti-drug, I take it. Makes me wanna thumbs up if he is. Frank's whole conversation with Ray made me smile, they're funny together.

I see. Layout is much better, looks good! :P

I like the part where he is looking at how Gerard and Jacob are opposite paths, a kind of fork where he's standing in the middle.

My brows pull together at reading Jacob being somewhere off in the city doing acid. He sounds unreliable and like a really bad idea for having a relationship with. Bad, bad news. But I guess by how flippant Frank is about it, he's not reliable either. Drugs are terrible.

Haha yes, thats what i wanted to happen because unfortunately for the story to work frank has to have an asshole shit side too. Especially when he isnt much of an asshole its more to show how much more fuckedup gerard made frank, when frank has himself convinced gerard was the thing that made him better. As much as i dislike making anyone a bad person in stories it has to happen.

What if Frank had kept his self-respect and came in clean and confident and merely made Gerard jealous?

I totally get what you mean.

Try writing out a list of things that you want to have happen, and then write the ending to the story and work your way towards it with the other chapters.

I like the picture that you have on the layout, but I think that under "story area" in your layout you should make the background white so that the words stand out and are readable, and the picture just shows up on the side. I've been using "default layout" so that I can read it easier. xD Or maybe you can make the picture repeat only vertically and align to the right so that it matches it's edge with the edge of the screen.

About the chapter, I lost respect for Frank in this one.

I'm kinda at the point were i'm stumped though were I've got so many good ideas and then so many good memories to make this story good,yet i don't know what to use first and what to disregard to he story, because i've lways been told that my stories tend to drabble on mindlessly an di ont want to kill this one by doing so. So im at the sad point of Writers Block -.-'

Wow, yay Frankie for having the guts to stand up for himself like that. And I'm kind of intrigued by Gerard's lack of retaliation and the way he seems to be cooperating with Frank to make their lives work together. I'm interested to know what changed for Frank to make him get fed up with Gee finally.

Thanks for helping fill the frerard gap, by the way :P