August 21st, 2010 at 08:36pm
That was beautifully written :)
AMAZING! I loved it.
Great job!
This bit at the end I loved the most,
Sometimes, it was funny how happy one person could make you, and how thoroughly he could break you.
Kind of inviting.
Layout
Plain-ish, but it is readable and that's what counts.
Summary
Very appealing. What did Danny do?
Story
1: Wow, the ending honestly surprised me. I thought it was the first girl getting married. I feel sorry for her, in a way, but also happy that she wanted her friend to be happy. I was almost crying as I read the last sentence. Perhaps that was your intention?
Overall
A very grand story that plays on the emotions. It was a bit disappointing not to see the girl's name, but I'll get over it. It's rare to find a good story with no dialogue. Very amazing job. I did catch quite a few mistakes, you should read over it to fix them. They are just common errors though, o no worries. =D Lovely story and good job! <3