November 8th, 2010 at 11:31pm
You made me cry
and I actually mean I was sitting on my bed, sobbing while reading this
although the fact that I'm listening to Your Guardian Angel by Red Jumpsuit Apparatus probably didn't help at all
you're such an amazing writer!!!
You'd better win this contest!!
Good luck doll :)
First, weird to see my name as a guy's name. Thought I'd point it out, haha(:
Okayyy - I like how they met, but something seems awkward about how Shay talks, I don't know how to explain it, but it seems very scripted.
It was cute, their love, but the ending tore at my heart strings, of course. I don't know if the italics work in this case, though. It seems like it would work fine with Brook just "telling" it.
Nice job!