Just Pretend - Comments

The layout is really pretty, and the picture is a bit too big for me, but it's still nice. I love
how you're able to convey such emotions into words that will actually impact the reader.
This didn't go at all how I expected it to end, I always thought in the end, she'd be angry
at him and leave him. She did leave him, I guess, but she wasn't as angry, or as hurt
as I thought she would be. Instead she didn't care. She doesn't care for him anymore,
and I really like how strong she was about it.

I really loved the layout and picture. So cute! Anyways, I really like this. I liked how detailed her feelings were and how much she loved this guy. Oh, and I loved how she didn't go back to him. Good for her, I say xD
Anyways, a truly amazing job! <3

Layout: I liked it very much, and the picture as well.
I really enjoyed that, I liked how well you descriped her feelings.
and I love the fact that she didn't go back to him, because most girls would do that,
well the girls I know (x
But, this was really good, I loved it.

The layout is nice, the picture's a little big but it's readable, which is the main focus.

how could you do this to me.
Questions mark.

I gave you my heart, my soul
comma after my soul.

I wanted to smile. At all the little
A comma, not a period. Or you could put "I wanted to smile, to smile at all the little things" it would sound nice, wouldn't it? :)

through our own door, into our own bed.
and into.

You really delve into her emotions well, and I like how even though she's fallen so deeply in love with him, she's planned out everything around him, she still has the decency to break up with him. It shows real independence.
Wonderful job.
:)