Walk In The Rain With Me - Comments

So this is crazy awesome. I don't much like A7X but Papa Roach is amazing ^_^

This is really good so far, I liked the links and I loved the summary picture.

I think this has a lot of potential, keep going with this!

This is... interesting.

I dislike the links you put into the story for images, but at the same time I think it's fairly clever.

Here's some statistics: (The higher the percent, the better I thought each thing was.)

Clarity: 80%
Believability: 60%
Characterization: 90%
Description: 85%
Dialog: 80%
Emotional Engagement: 65%
Grammar/Spelling: 90%
Imagery: 70%
Intellectual Engagement: 60%
Pacing: 65%
Plot: 85%
Readability: 85%

<3