Only in a Dream - Comments

  • StillShakey

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    wow
    the fashing border really is distracting
    November 29th, 2010 at 10:46am
  • shelbyvengeance

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    yeah. its i did describe my characters good in my other stories... i think. this story is based on a dream i had... weird i know
    October 11th, 2010 at 06:06am
  • Sev4Rever

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    I'd be surprised if anyone who joined Mibba didn't like writing. (some form, Stories, poems, songs.) This is really good, and I agree that the characters need to be described a little bit more. Thumbs up on this though! :D
    October 11th, 2010 at 05:52am
  • StillShakey

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    i luv writing stories
    August 16th, 2010 at 10:28pm
  • ninjaturtle-tori

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    hmmm. I love this idea(:
    the characters are good, just not exactly completely,...solid.

    Can't wait for more!
    August 16th, 2010 at 03:12am
  • shelbyvengeance

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    sorry i haven't made a background for this story yet
    August 15th, 2010 at 11:01pm
  • Hippieantarchist

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    I like this story so far, but I must say, the flashing border is a little distracting lol
    August 15th, 2010 at 04:18pm
  • flyers

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    Some advice- try to take the time to expain things moe instead of rushing through things. Slow it down a bit and describe what's going on. What hotel are they staying at? What do the characters look like?

    But other than that, I like this story :]
    August 11th, 2010 at 09:47am
  • Straight-outta-Dodge

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    I'm just writing this comment as a way to get the comment ball swinging But it's going to be very very lame due to my eyes closing in on me, ever so quickly...so this is just a promise comment that I'll read up later...
    August 11th, 2010 at 01:42am