Que Quowle. - Comments

I can't see my layout since they changed Mibba around. I tried to remove the layout and just have the white background, but may I also keep in mind that I've grown as a writer since I began this story, and there is a a second story, which I hopefully will be starting when I get my laptop fixed and my school work underway. Until then, I'm going to go through the chapters and I'm fixing the errors and places where the story may seem out of it.

Favorite quotes! "What is this?"

"Well, it's Jake and Aliyah, and they're sleeping." I recognized Jared's voice.

"No no no, they're not sleeping. Jake's cuddling." Embry snickered as if it was the funniest thing in the world. 15-Paul on the other hand, stepped forward, bursting into his own large horse-sized ball of dark silver fur.

"Aliyah, why are you topless?" Sam asked, raising an eyebrow at me.

I folded my arms, "Long story."

18-"I don't see why you wouldn't just go for Edwin..."

"Edwin?" Edwin. Hahaha

20-"For.. a damaged girl—" Leah heaved heavily.

Emily finished her sentence, "You run mighty fast." hahaha

In answer to the person below, I have two reasons why people aren't commenting. Firstly, The layout is really hard to read. I read most of the story using only the bottom half of the screen, and other times, highlighted the entire page to read- and it was still glaringly difficult. Secondly, I would highly, highly, HIGHLY recommend skimming through the story and editing it. I debated with myself in the beginning of the story about whether or not I should read one with a hard layout and spelling errors, but the plot managed to win me over, along with the main characters and some of the quoted lines. But while I did like it, I'd like to say again that I almost didn't read it. Did Victoria end up hitting Aliyah at the end? They seemed to have almost an acquaintance-like relationship during their little scene, but she was overly battered when she returned. And, of course, Bella is a fucking bitch.

^ i agree with the no comments thing!! your a asome writer!! keep it up!!

I haven't the faintest clue why no one is commenting. >.>
I really like this, and I don't want this story to go down hill!
Try and find an editor to fix your diologue and grammer. You end up
putting the letter "I" together with other words in most of the chapter.

And I think i'm going to try and make you a banner, (:
And if you'd like help with a layout or anything, let me know, :D

<3 Update soon.

I like this :D can't wait for the next update!

Hmm, seems to be good.
Might want to change the layout so it catches attention
and it's more readable.