August 12th, 2010 at 09:42am
I'm usually a big fan of "..."s but in this I don't think that one was needed, the story to me had a short little snappy almost comedic feel to it and I think that threw off the flow.
Otherwise, if was a very short, cute little story. As for the layout, I think it would have looked better with the text centered {considering you have a lot of short phrases}.
Drabbles are my favorite thing to read, I do believe. And it makes it better when they drabble is good.
This was sweet, short, and to the point.
I really liked it :D