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  • EpicPantsPeople

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    I don't like the Jonas Brother's very much, but I loved this with a passion. It was so ironic. The boy with a purity ring on drugs? Beautiful. "Don't Let them get to you" Really did bring it home. Your choice of Joe Jonas just helped further the point. Really good job. It also suprised the crap out of me XD
    August 18th, 2010 at 01:32pm
  • eternally.forever;;

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    :)
    It's an awesome one-shot!
    I really loved it!
    Good job darling!:)
    :)
    August 14th, 2010 at 09:34pm
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    Don't let them get to you

    I liked how you ended such a descriptively dramatic story with that simple warning. The best part about this was that you used a group that has been so freaking over commercialized and 'airbrushed' and made them - for the lack of a better word - human.

    Ten out of ten for flow, imagery and emotion. Great work!
    August 14th, 2010 at 04:23pm
  • Bipolar Halo

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    Honestly when I saw Joe Jonas one shot I was like "f*ck I have to read a fan fic now and it's 1,400+ words. Sh*t."

    I did not expect that at all. Joe snorting hell no. That was freaking great and when you described the seizure, it was raw and just damn!

    That was so really good writing right there. Really sad it ended like that, but it was a great read.
    August 14th, 2010 at 07:21am
  • Acid Milk

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    Ack, sorry I didn't get to post a comment for a while. I was away.
    I don't really like the Jonas Brothers, but this was a really nice story. :)
    August 14th, 2010 at 07:05am
  • sexualbull

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    Well, I must say, I don't like the Jonas Brothers one bit, but I did enjoy reading this quite a bit. I can't even really explain why, but it was something that I would have been drawn to if I had seen it on the stories page. Very well done.
    August 14th, 2010 at 06:32am
  • SNOOKI WAS HERE.

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    O.O
    Okay;
    so I don't like the Jonas Bros, but this didn't really circle around them - it centered around fame and what fame can do to someone.
    I really, really liked this - maybe more than I should've. <3 It's great, as is your writng.
    August 14th, 2010 at 05:56am
  • stallion ducky;

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    When I looked at it, I wasn't expecting it to be about drugs.
    And it was. And I liked it, surprisingly.

    I loved how you ended it. It brought it all home.
    And I also loved how you changed it up every few paragraphs. Joe went from being Joe, to Joseph, to the Jonas brother, to the addict. It made it easier and more pleasurable to read.

    The detail was large and you had a good array of vocabulary. (:
    Great job, over all, I'd say!

    P.S: why didn't people comment? :3
    August 14th, 2010 at 05:36am
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