This is a very well written sweet story. I love your writing style with which you have wrote this one shot. Simone's easy voice telling the story really paints a beautiful picture of how she fell in love with Josh and how they got to together. Your writing flows really well and the concepts displayed are really interesting. There's not many stories on mibba that tackle the concepts of racisim and you do it really well. The only criticism I can give is that you could maybe have included more details about how people have or wanted to prosecute them throughout the story as well as at the end so that it would make more sense as to why Simone would immediately think the car crash was due to racisim, but that's just my opinion. Apart from that well done (:
January 25th, 2011 at 07:14am