Oh my darling this is amazing! I just spent a good hour reading Eden and now this, it's just beautiful. You create a very vivid image of the characters and the scenarios.
It was good. There's a few mistakes where a word wasn't the right word. Just so ya know.
Aw, Hillie is a rising star. Woot! I like her little happy place with the apocalypse of art supplies around her. Good description :) Bahha, Batman. I do love Batman...I got a new Batman toy at McDonalds. Oh boy. It was a good chapter and Valo is a true gent.
Ahha, thanks for that description! Pfft. Live wire in a good way, I hope! Or else I will release the CAPS!
Okay, sooo I think the for sale sign outside of her old house is good symbolism. Look, I'm getting technical here with my analyzing. Well, right, that's all I got. Anyway, glad to see Hillie changing and trying to make up a new life. WOOT! I commented twice today. Pretty good, eh? So update now for everyone else, ha.
We get that you are busy don't force anything, a creative process must take it's time :)