The Avoidance - Comments

FINALLY
i have been waiting and waiting for that update and now i wanna read the next
ur doin GREAT wid this storry kath
XxX

Yea, that pretty much my draft, and my thoughts at the current time. But I added some extra stuff so I'll add to itshortly and yea. Thanksfor the feedback

It seems like a great plot. :)
Just a few comments.
Perhaps more describing of situations, people and places.
Also adding some dialogue would really bring this story to life.
I can't wait to find out how the story progresses. :)
Good Luck!