I actually went an read this before I went and told you I was going to. Which is why I got the title wrong, oops.
Anyways, You need to work on set-up. The idea was there, and it was great. Please correct your italicize problem. Also for letters and time skips it's alright to have the letters in italics as well having time skips along the lines of "A few days later"
Which is why I got the title wrong, oops.
Anyways, You need to work on set-up.
The idea was there, and it was great. Please correct your italicize problem. Also for letters and time skips it's alright to have the letters in italics as well having time skips along the lines of "A few days later"
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Is kind of annoying^