Forever missed - Comments

HA I bet Matt is in total shock

See?That was reeeeally good. Idk y u were debating quiting I loved it.Yea Mrs. Val comes itno the picture!I absolutely ADORE her..Not like her stupid bitch twin Michelle!Or her loser ex friend and Jimmy's ex Leana!Great update!Try for more soon yea?

Loved loved the update!!!yes their should b sexy time lol Great job!!

HOLY HELL UPDATE B 4 I GO INSANE lol but seriously update like this is my new favorite story!!

Wow this is a damned good story I really like it

Meep.. I has blue hair~
Lol.
x3

This story is awesome ^_^'

I really like this story hun :D

If he hadn't cheated

PSH! I could've beat him lol

lol i was getting excitedd...then there was no more chapters update lots??

Hey! So this is your first story huh? Well, I hope you don't mind that I critique it a bit. :)

First off, the font is a little big. When you put it in your layout, it's very spaced out and often difficult to read. If you made it smaller and chose a lighter colour, it would flow a lot better and would be more appealing to the eye.
Secondly, your first chapter isn't technically allowed. That should go on your description page, not as your first chapter. It happens sometimes, so don't worry about it. Also, your work does need a bit of space between when the characters talk and your descriptions. Other than that, I really think you have something here that people will like. Keep up the good work. :)