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appley92 (100)

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shit. that was intense! do it again! lol.

i love this <3

November 21st, 2011 at 03:31pm

reeseynicole21 (100)

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Ugh. What took you so long! Were you sick! You could have been in a ditch! You could at least called me and told me you were going to be gone that long! You had me worried sick! Are you crazy! Update soon and you're grounded. Anyway lol.....i sounded like my mom...

November 20th, 2011 at 10:14pm

K. Taylor (100)

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I really like the concept of this story. There are a few grammatical errors that kind of distracted me from the story as well as spelling errors. I also noticed you start the sentence off in the present tense only to transition into the past. It was off-setting.

The story idea itself is unique and I look forward to reading more

November 20th, 2011 at 08:49pm

appley92 (100)

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dude!! four words--- KEEP GOING!!!!! :DDD

its so good- i love it ! i love the concept and the writing and im sorry about whatever shit youre going through but just remember, the sun comes out tomorrow and youre an amazing writer! :)

btw im liz <3

October 28th, 2011 at 06:31am

Im_A_Fan_Of_Myself (100)

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Jst Start Reading it anf I love it cant wait for more

July 5th, 2011 at 06:17pm

Lizanator! (100)

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Gahh, I love this.
We can work together with this because you CAN NOT stop this story!
& the sex was pretty good. Could have been a bit more descriptive, cause I'm a pig and all :P

June 16th, 2011 at 02:26am

reeseynicole21 (100)

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I love this story....don't delete it please.
Sincerely,
A Fan

June 9th, 2011 at 08:12am

I_like_to_write (100)

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Good
-LTW

February 24th, 2011 at 04:20am

fallinAngell16 (100)

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I love this story so far! It's great!
I think that if the main guy was RIley it would be an interesting twist though, that last chapter was a good set up for that twist in the plot!
Can't wait to see what happens either way :D

January 13th, 2011 at 05:32am

Cecila220 (100)

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Cute story, pleeaassee upload soon

January 13th, 2011 at 03:48am

the epic blonde (100)

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DONT DELETE IT!!! I LOVE THIS STORY! If you really don't like it, start it over. Maybe then you'll feel more inspired to write it(: whatever you choose to do, I still love this story and you for writing it, but I hope you decide to keep it<333

November 3rd, 2010 at 04:13am

LyndsaylurvesLogan (100)

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Wow, this is really good so far. :)

I already quite like Kali's character, and it helps that Riley is Xavier Samuel and Brad is Alex Pettyfer; dude. You have great taste in guys! XD

I can't wait to see when (*cringes* or if,) you post another chapter.

Happy writing! :D

August 31st, 2010 at 12:14pm

Harli Love (100)

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i love this : )

August 21st, 2010 at 02:52am

xoxbrooklynxox (100)

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I love it , keep writing

August 20th, 2010 at 07:29am