September 9th, 2011 at 06:16pm
Personally, I found the layout quite confusing and distracting, so I've set it to default.
The beginning is heartbreaking - I can hear it like it's a voiceover paired with a dark screen for the start of a film - and I'm curious as to what happened to the little boy. The mother speaks of him with so much love and affection that it's sort of breaking my heart. I'm almost curious as to if he was stricken with cancer or something of that sort.
The father's love is so wonderful, it's weird almost to see that they're together since you know all of those stories who have like a single parent and such. The praying thing is absolutely wonderful, oh my god. I can imagine that if it was a child who could've been lost that my extended family would do the same, it's wonderful and just realistic and perfect.
Jack's okay, yaaay! I'm curious as to what he had still, but the hope and how that kept being reiterated was absolutely wonderul and just... right. I can see it as a short film and its just heartbreaking with always that bit of hope in it until it just envelopes us all.
Awesome.
As for the story itself, I absolutely adored it. It was beautiful. I went through a phase of writing tragedies with hopeful endings last year and this makes me think of them. It was wonderfully written.
Also, another commenter said they believed the nurse was rude and unprofessional but as the daughter of a nurse, a girl who has spent a lot of time at the hospital, and a future nurse, that's just the way it would be handled. (Polite but firm.)
Well done.