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  • VioletChelsea

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    How is she running out of time?!?!
    October 28th, 2010 at 12:12am
  • VioletChelsea

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    Uh Maz Ing. Am I seriously your biggest fan?? I LOVE all your stories!!!!
    October 23rd, 2010 at 10:09pm
  • lions

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    I really enjoyed reading this, and I can absolutely relate to the wonder of being lost in a book.

    One thing I noticed is how many sentences start with 'I'
    Try using other variations of sentences or when you write circle all the 'I', it might scare you but that's the tricky part of writing in first person.

    Other than that, I love your layout and the banner fits perfectly. Great job! 
    August 24th, 2010 at 09:56am
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