Dear author, first of all, having a full length story as the sequel of a two-shot doesn't seem nice. Both prequel and sequel should be one chaptered story. The sequel is better than the prequel and that's because you potrayed their feelings better and your descriptions were more detailed. Editing the prequel to fit the writing style of the sequel and turning it to one chaptered story, would add points to to it. I think it was too soon for Michael to turn his friendly love to a lover's love, plus he hated fags and that takes time. I enjoyed reading it thought, especially the hospital parts and the beach side villa parts. I give you eight and half out of ten pens for this. ~Marian.
February 13th, 2013 at 12:53pm
