A Stain That Never Comes Off. - Comments

wow!!! this story is really good, very good plotline! i really like it, you have excellent writing skills. there are a few spelling errors but nothing too major.
so...more soon??
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loveeeeeeeeeeee it!!

I WOULD HATE to have to see peoples sins :p

MORE!

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ooo more NOW please

wow second chapter EVEN BETTER!!!

wow awsum story so far, i havent read the second one yet though lol...
but i think this will be a RAD story, your a great writer .. keep going!
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eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

whats his siiiiiiiiiiin!!

Ahh wowowowowowowowowow. Amazing. I'd try to copy-paste all of my favorite parts but that would basically be the whole thing.

My eyes are duller than they should be. My hair is always greesy and flat. I'm about as pale as a zombie. I have small chicklet teeth. I'm too skinny for my own good. You can see my ribs. My hib bones protrude out of my skin. My legs are like tooh picks. My hands are boney. My lip peircing looks awful on me. My ears are too gauged, and my nose is too pointy.

I love that part. Most stories with boy protaganists skip over description and say 'I hate the way I look girls think I'm pretty I have black hair (duh)'. Aiden's not like that. Aiden knows why he doesn't like the way he looks, and Aiden knows that everyone has different perceptions of beauty.

'I try to go about my life as normal as possible. I go to school, and I have a family whom I love. A family that holds a few of their own sins, but who dosen't? I can't stray away from the world because of my senses. My family dosen't know about what I see, not just because they probably wouldn't believe me, but because what I see will haunt you for ages to come.'

Again, different from most stories. Aiden doesn't have friends, and Aiden doesn't really care. He tries as hard as he can to get through life, and not having friends is just a bump in the road. Aiden's parents don't know because they are like normal people- they fear the unknown. He knows that they wouldn't accept it, like a parent wouldn't accept having a child with other gifts. It's unknown, therefore, fear-worthy.

I mumbled while reached my shaking hand out to grasp onto his. His cold flesh touched mine and in an instant I saw it all. Everything in the world that he has done wrong. Every lie, every time he tripped over life. It was all there, secretly plauging his heart. But what I saw last, is the worst of them all. I trembled at his touch, and recoiled my hand away quickly.

Perfect cliffhanger. Not only are Aiden's thoughts about what he saw displayed in the following paragraph, it leaves the reader wanting to know just what he saw that was so 'sick' and 'sadistic'.

All in all, a very good story. There are some minor spelling errors that can be fixed (mostly in the first chapter), but it doesn't distract from the reading.

haha.
brett's in the story.
good imagery.
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Wow! great story & plotline! You're really a unique writer!! :-)
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i heart it.
the story shall be radical.
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i love it.
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i read it out loud to myself
and it sounds beautiful.