Thorns - Comments

I love the picture on the side. I also love the story itself- the concept was a really interesting one that I haven't really seen before.

You did a really good job. :]

Thank you for saying the word count and I liked it.
The only problem was the font. I couldn't read that and I had to copy it to word so I was a little ticked.
But it was good. Good job.

Ok like I said in your other one this too feels like a creepy nursery rhyme. I wish you would have made a layout for it simply because the original layout just doesn’t draw me in, but I still read it and this was a pretty decent story. I think it flows a lot better than your last one but like I said on my comment on your other drabble there were parts of it that were great and parts of it that just didn’t work for me. I really don’t mean to offend or discourage or anything because you aren’t a bad writer and I really feel potential with these but they could use some work. This one has a fantastic concept though, particularly the line “Roses so beautiful, yet they're hurting me.”

I think this was bloody brilliant. It read almost poem like because you made it rhyme, which I think is good because I’m horrible at that. So I envy you. I also like how you made it one hundred words, exact. That’s what drabble is and I see stories with a 300 word count posted as drabble.
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I loved the scene you painted in my head, and the metaphors you used. Using a rose was brilliant.

I couldn’t find any spelling errors or puncuational errors. But if you are entering in this in a contest you might want to create a layout instead of using default. Most of the time the people holding contests like to see a unique layout.