Amazing. This could have easily gone too far,or been not enough. You definately hit the nail on the head with writing this one (: Really good job I really loved it and enjoyed it <333
This must be one of the sickest stories i have ever read but i liked it :D It was gross and romantic at the same time, i'll probably read this ove and over and over again. Haha, like the others say; this should deffinatly become a longer story. I would have love to read more about this, but then again it's your choice :P
Damn girl, this was fucking amazing. You had such well developed scenes. It was so freaking good. I had such vivid pictures come to my mind. So sick, yet wonderful at the same damn time....lol. I could so see this into a story. I really hope you make it into one where you explain the beginning and such. I would so totally read it!! Great job!!