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I can't wait for the next chapter(:
Loved it!

You had me on the edge of my seat :3

damn, this is awesome (: subscribed :D

I love this story, is different from the other mafia stuff I've read. I hope you can update soon.

love it can yu update please? :)

GAHH UPDATE I NEED TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS D:

are u gonna update??

This story is really good, I like it very much! I hope you can update soon :)

The only thing that dimmed the seriousness of this was the fact that Go, Diego, Go! was playing in the background, because I'm too lazy to turn the TV onto a different channel.

I really, really like it, Tomi. :) It's great. Your writing has improved so much and it's interesting to see what you write like in this genre. Damn, if I was Riley, I'd be staying tied up, dude. I wouldn't want to get in even more trouble, because you just know Tom's going to find her and beat the shit out of her. I'd be staying in that car, hoping to God that he decided to randomly let me go...or not. If I liked Tom, or thought he was attractive, I'd be like, "Gimme some more of that, mhm" even though he's, you know, part of the Mafia or whatever. XD Must be the masochism talking. But yeah, keep on writing this. ;)

I didn't know you had updated. I'm sorry. :(

I REAAAAAAAALY like dis!

I love this (:

OH MA GAWD
update sooon!
i love this soo much! :D
<3
xoxox

This story is the chiz, doode!
I really love it. My heart was poundinq at the end of the third chappie! In a qood way thouqh[:
I've qotta have moree!
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Well she obviously won't get very far

Update soooonnnn!!! =D

That.Was.Awesome.
I demand more! ;D
Haha, update soon, yeah..?
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Okay, I suppose if it's Stockholm Syndrome, then she could fall in love. >.> After all, I have a story with Bill as a serial killer and Tom as the boy he falls in love with that he doesn't want to kill and Tom falls in love with him, but then again, it's not really Stockholm Syndrome since Tom crushes on Bill before he even knows he's a serial killer--
*is shot*

ABUSE. ~*ABUSE*~. I love it. It made me smile to see it, as sick and terrible as that is, but I did. I smiled so big as I was reading all the horrible stuff he did to her. I didn't know you had it in ya, Tomi. ;) But you do. So keep writing that abuse, dude. And Savannah will be happy. XD I have some really nasty, awful suggestions for stuff he can do to her but I'll let you take care of that.
He should totally give her an enema, oh my god, that would be fucking awesome.
SO YEAH, I'M NOT SICK AND DISTURBED AT ALL LOLOL.

Oh, and the layout is a little hard to read. >.< Maybe make the background darker and the text lighter? D:

Okay, so I really, really didn't mean not to comment on this. I swear. I really do. Which is why I'm commenting on it right now, k? K.

As you know, I tend to write disturbing, confusing, weird plotlines. So when I read this when you sent it to me in the message I got all happy because this is exactly the kind of sadism/masochism kind of thing I love. I was reading a story on THF about Bill's fictional wife being abused by him because he gets into drugs and it made me happy to read it, and this is the same way. :) I really can't wait to see if you're going to keep this all messed up and creepy or if you're going to turn it around and make her fall in love or whatever. (Please don't. D:) But yeah, I really do like it and like I said, your grammar and spelling is a lot better and your sentences flow nicely. :)

Sadistic, narcissistic, the makings of a good criminal, the perfect bad guy, Good job with the characterization. Wonder what well happen to poor Riley...... imagination is frighting don't you think. >X<

He's so mean! :(