I really enjoy this story, I love the plot and the way you portray awkwardness. I just wanted to suggest that you either proof read or find a friend willing to beta it as there are multiple grammatical, syntactic and lexical erorrs, as well as awkward speech, which make your writing slightly stilted.
I'd be happy to proof read if you want to message me :)
Hi! I've been bummed for almost a week... But this story cheered me up! :) I would be very happy if you update soon! So please..... PleasepleasepleasePLEASE UPDATE!!!!
oh no, it's fine, I just thought of it. :D actually, when I read what you said, I immediately went to the comment area to see what I had written down xD love the update BTW <3 keep updating!!! ...I just love Frank in this chapter. awwww... he's so cute. xoxo <3
I LOVEEEEEEEE keep updating, this is really good :) I was actually thinking that Gerard would become Frank's 'girlfriend' for a while, but oh well. update soon <3
I love this story! I was kinda disappointed when I wanted to read the next chapter and there wasn't any lolz but jeep up the great work and update soon pleaseeeee!
lol. at first i thought it was going to be Stop and Stare by OneRepublic but finally looked up the song and found We Don't Need Another Song About California.