The Girls Shower - Comments

I have to ask, what details you're missing, since I'm not sure, what you're pointing at.

There are a lot of grammatical errors, especially passive verbs. I also don't quite enjoy the way this is written, it lacks a lot of detail and description and a lot of short fragment like sentences.

Thanks. I'll just have to go over the entire story to see, exactly what's what.
From Boy, into girl, just like the title promised.

Wow....um.....wow. There were a couple of mistakes here and there. SOme sentences that didn't make that much sense......... but uh...this is very interesting! So, it was a boy, and then he turned into a girl...right? After taking the shower? Great job! I love it! Keep me posted on updates please!