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  • julie.addies.smile

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    the first chapter was ok but there is something i dont like about the main character i guess its how she "talks" like for example: “Just come,” he replied, pulling me with him. “Fine,” I pouted..

    i didnt like the part where she said "fine" it sounded boring
    but the rest was awesome like yu just want to keep reading
    yu need to put much more action into what the cahracters and
    how they talk make them come to life
    it was a big iamgination of urs though i loved it <3 =P
    September 28th, 2010 at 02:30am
  • Vindicated

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    DUDE!!
    nice i like it XDD
    moremoremoremore
    Blake is rich..that means..XDD
    ummm...yah..plz update soon
    September 3rd, 2010 at 10:51am
  • Vindicated

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    its really nice!!
    dude MOREMOREMOREMORE!!
    i want to see something happen like??!!like
    magic or summons XD!!
    lol dont mind me to much anime XD
    September 2nd, 2010 at 03:01pm
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