Heartbreak Warfare - Comments

God this was amazing.

God this was amazing.

Seriously, this made me tear up. The title fits perfectly with the plot of the story. This was so well-written that it nearly made me cry!

Now I understand why its called 'Heartbreak Warfar' , that went well XD

You already know how I feel about your writing and your originality, so I'll save that...Just want to say this was truely great! It was definently full of emoticon coming from both characters, Asher being in love with Oliver, being hurt because of Oliver, feeling like a mistake, its like all this emoticons she got caught in. Oliver feeling like he was being forced into being with Asher, he was really confused, and probably just wanted to know if he should make it work, and he confused Asher to...but she knew he never loved her, and probably never will. Ah..so heart breaking XD, I loved it though!

I absolutely LOVED reading this!! I almost wish you would make this into a series, instead of just a one-shot. I want to know what happens to Asher, Oliver and the baby!! This is definitely a sign of a good author :)

this stpry was unbelievable! the entire time while reading I looked at te scroll down bar and was like "please don't let be be over soon" I never wanted it to end! also, I like stories with sort of a not happy ending, because this way it's not all lovey dovey, even though I do think, just like soapy, that this story is has real potential to be turned into a full story, really!
and also I really like your type of writing, you're one great author!

AMAZING! You have become one of my favorite authors dude! You write so well, and I can feel everything as if I'm living it. It's so well done, I really hope you win, I don't even need to read the other contestants, yours is the best, I think you should win!

i read this last night and it was freaking amazing! your writing is so good. it was all so amazing! i reckon you should make this into a proper story, the idea is so good and you could really develop it, even ideas for this story is flowing through my head right now about what you could do. gosh, it was just so good! i reckon this had real potential for a full on story. i didnt realize it was just a one off for a contests. everything fixed together from start to finish. i don't really like pregnant stories but this was so good, i love it! i hope you win, it's so good, i really do think you should develop it. i'd be well kean to read it! :D

FUCK ME FOR GOING TO BED LAST NIGHT WITHOUT CHECKING MY COMMENTS SO I COULDNT READ THIS UNTIL NOW.

But oh my GOD this was so fantasticallly good. I lobed the ending; it wouldn't have fit with the secret if they ended up happy and ~in love, even if that's what I wanted ;3 Being honest, I was a little skeptical when I found out it was about a pregnant girl. But then as I read I couldn't help but love it. I loved Oliver's confusion and how he shoved her into the clothes rack. I loved how you kept repeating "He didn't love me. And it drove me crazy." because it just emphasized the point.

Great job! <333