My So-Called Life - Comments

Any updates anytime soon?

Oh, and yes, I'm guilty. I was bored, so I was surfing about, looking at profiles and my stuff, and...I wanted to see if you finally updated. X3 And you did, and I liked it.

(Forgive for the double comment.)

I have to say I noticed that the details and description was risen. However. I'm not sure what the point of describing her entire apartment was, if they didn't even went there. Like I've said before, details should be about the things that around them. Things that they can see, they can smell, they can feel, and occasional thoughts.

But that may be just me.

In any case, the fourth chapter was good. It had caught my attention, yes, since I read all of it. Keep improving; I have a feeling you'll do just great if you do.

With Italian desserts and napkins for Carmen,
♥ Luna ♥

I want that apartment D:
And as a side note, its easier and catches reader's attention more if you say things in your author's note than commenting your own story.
Update soon?

Thanks for the comments guys.
Very sweet.
I hope this layout is alright, otherwise I'll have to ask someone for some help.

Okay, I'm going to be completely honest here so please don't shoot me if you have a virtual gun. First of all, the layout makes the story difficult to read, it hurt my eyes. Secondly, the flow just seems a bit choppy. I don't know, maybe that's just me, but I would reccomend re-reading your story and possibly re-phrasing some sentences. I'm also not too crazy about the plot, but I have really weird taste that is hard to satisfy so don't take it too hard. I'm sure some people love it, but to me, it just seems like any old book I could find in the school library. You have potential, just keep practicing and expand your borders. Good luck, I have faith in you. :) I hope I wasn't too harsh.

i love love looove the idea you put in here(: update soon! your a pretty awesome writer. xox

I liked it. I was in a bit of a daze myself when I read this, but it was well written and it intrigued me, I suppose.
Huh. Isn't it a weird coincidence that her name is Malia, and his name is Milo? Woooo. X3 I was sort of--scratch that, I was in Zone Luna when I read he was deaf. I had not expected it to go that way. I thought it would be about Malia being irresponsible and letting this guy take advantage of her. Eh, I guess I was wrong.

Again, very well written - some mistakes, here and there - but other wise, it was good.

<3 Keep up the good work.

XD Chipmunk on steriods?! Wow this story made me laugh a lot :) I really like it - more please.

I liked it, but I can only see the words if I highlight them! Fix it?
Longer chapters next time?

This seems like it might be a good story.
Update soon?