Little Boy - Comments

I loved how this drabble really flowed together.
Almost like as if it were a poem.
&I liked how he was only aknowlaged as little boy,
I don't know why exactly, but it just adds to the feel I guess.
If that makes sense, but either way, it was really good,
I loved it:]

I cannot say how much I really loved this drabble. Apart from the fact that it is strictly one hundred words, something that most people on here don’t achieve.

I’m torn between it flowing perfectly smooth and a little awkward. It wasn’t so awkward that it was distracting or having me backtracking. I’ll just say that it flowed nicely.

I like what you are expressing here. How it is a boy who is lying to the world but there is a girl, whom he’s involved with, that knows the truth. It’s so emotional. You can feel that this girl isn’t happy with him, that she almost resents him while he degrades her.

One of my favorite lines would have to be “You’re a liar and a cheat. You play rough, you’re not so sweet.” I like how it rhymes and it also describes him really well in two sentences.

I think this is brilliant!