Pressures of the Mind - Comments

The layout is kind of trippy, yeah, but it doesn't work well with the picture. The background is more purple and the picture is green/yellow.
My opinion, no need to take it seriously.
:)

I love how you repeat the "she wanted to ___" mostly because I think repeating things has that sort of flow that easily rolls off the tongue in that really nice way. It's relatable as well, as others pointed out. Not only the pressure, but the love part. And I love how short and choppy it is, kind of makes it all seem more severe, the more flowery it wouldn't probably have hit as hard.

Though, I also think the last sentence shouldn't have a comma. It would hit me harder without one, more like kind of that husky whisper at the end of moves that sends chills down your spine, just flows without the pause.
Y'know?

Beautifully done, seriously, and just for a drabble it tells an amazing story.
:)

That was sort of creepy. Disturbiamusicvideo-esque.

Well done. <3

Dr.

The layout was pretty trippy, aha. :)

Like Alice said, this is easily relatable about the pressure of life going on. I liked the detail in all the stages; it was lovely.<3 Such a wallop in so few words.

Amazing. (:
<3

I looove this. A lot of people are really able to relate and to understand the feelings in it. Great job. :)

This really got to me, because it could easily be related to.
Especially when it comes to having so much pressure in your life.
When reading this, my chest hurt, and I don't think that really makes sense, but you did a great job with this xoxo.

Damn! I wanted to be the first to comment! Oh well anyways I was going to tell you that you left out "to" in the laugh sentenced, but you fixed it when I refreshed the page. Anyways I loved it, it was deep just like I knew it would be. Nice!

comment comment comment comment comment.... I like how every thing the asked for turned against her as she realized she wanted it :) crazy good!
you already know what i told you to fix so now there is nothing for me to b*tch about :)
love you and your sh*t!