The whole time I was reading this I was kind of bugged that it didn't have a pretty made-up layout haha. That's half the fun of clicking on a story on Mibbs woman. Seeing yet another personalized and specificed piece of creativity to accompany the words.<3 It's part of the equation! :)
But other than that, I kind of liked this. It was flowy and had nice detail. I didn't really notice any grammar or spelling mistakes so that was a really nice touch. C:
I'm with Fly, however, I don't like the cliffhangers. D; </3