For a first one-shot this is pretty good! I Think you had a clear idea in your head and I can see that very well. While the story is a but muddled and I can't figure out what her secret is, i think it has poetential. There were some mistakes I noticed, but other than that it was a worthwhile peice!
For a first one-shot this is pretty good! I Think you had a clear idea in your head and I can see that very well. While the story is a but muddled and I can't figure out what her secret is, i think it has poetential. There were some mistakes I noticed, but other than that it was a worthwhile peice!
-Emily