Just Play Dead - Comments

This is so beautiful.

You draw the reader in straight away with the absolutely stunning layout and the very intriguing summary, and you keep up the attention with your gorgeous descriptions, which are just perfectly suited to the plot of the story.

I love your inclusion of the memory in the first chapter, and how you only afterwards explain the significance of it to the reader. It's a very clever techinque, and really grabbed me, wondering what it was about.

You write the interaction between Clare and Jane and Mr. Hollow very well. It is clear you have a brilliant grasp of who each character is, and how they act together, and this is very well portrayed to the reader.

The quotation in chapter four is a very clever introduction of the events of the chapter for the reader. It reminded me slightly of the two quotes at the beginning of Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows, and it fitted very well with the whole tone of the story overall.

And yes, the last chapter also brought a tear to my eye.

I love it.

This was all at once beautiful and tragic. You've got good descriptions and it's written in such a lovely way. The only thing I'd suggest is spacing out the dialogue, because it becomes cluttered and confusing otherwise.

intriguing story!
i have the same name as her... and same spelling, it's weird because it is usually spelt with an i
anyway, loving it all!
more soon :D

This is so good! It's really attention getting and you're an amazing writer!

Okay, so I've only read the prologue so far, but I can't wait to read more! I plan on reading all of it, I just wanted to comment now.

Okay, so first, you're an amazing writer, really. I love your word choices and you really capture the readers attention. I've never read anything with the same kind of character as Clare (does that make sense?) so I can't wait to read on. Also, I like how she doesn't know what she's doing, it's intriguing. So yeah, I'm gonna go read the rest. :)

This is really interesting. I'm curious about the voices, and what or who could be making them. Mr. Hollow interests me, as well. I'm not sure how he's important in the story yet, other than what's been said so far, but I want to find out. Clare's parents annoy me, though. For some reason, I think there's something fishy about them.

I love the layout and the story keep it up! (:
You can't stop reading this story once you start

I love the layout.
This is deifnitley something I would buy.
It's creepy and chilling.
Amazing job. <3

I love the layout, and the summary is quite intriguing.
I love the creepy, otherworldly feel that this story has to it, so much. You also portrayed Clare's fear wonderfully, as well as that trancey, sleepwalker feel. I'm really liking this so far, I'm loved to read more.

I quite like this so far.

The voices are mysteriously intruiging - enough to keep me captivated!

Update soon, yes? I subscribed. <3

First, I absolutely love the layout. It's so pretty and so is the picture (: Anyways, I loved all the emotions in this. You could really feel her fear; it was really, truly a scary thing to read. The voices creeped me out though o.O But overall, I really enjoyed reading this. Since it's the prologue, I'm guessing that it's a full story? It's really awesome so far! I'm definitely subbing <3
Lovely job (: