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  • leavingggggggg

    leavingggggggg (100)

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    Aliyah, I love this. I can't believe you only have two comments. It was so perfectly executed and so strongly written, and the layout is beautiful, especially the banner. I did spot one thing, though.

    "Your lips taste like, vomit," Eames chuckles.

    No comma after like. :)

    In conclusion, your writing is more beautiful than NATALIE PORTMAN.
    February 28th, 2011 at 02:11pm
  • sweet clementine.

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    One comment?

    Wow.

    /applause.

    /applause

    /APPLAUSE.

    Wow, Aliyah, this was amazing amazing amazing.

    That silk tea can really whip up a banner, wow!

    It went with the story well, too.

    Good job, 10/10.
    November 27th, 2010 at 03:07am
  • the fallen.

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    tehe
    I LOVED IT.
    Don't know why no one commented.
    I loved it how he kisses him even though he has vomit.
    THAT'S love. lmfao

    Great job, like always.
    November 1st, 2010 at 10:46pm
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