October 4th, 2010 at 12:20am
chapter 1:
i love the layout for this!
xD yeah him and his alcohol :/
ohh someone wants to get laid by that girl haha
i actualy imagine the girl as Kara xD
i don't know why, it just kinda happened haha
Ashlyn is a pretty name! i like it!
oh gosh they're gonna have sex
but i saw that coming haha
stupid drunk driver jack xD
haha funny ending :]
chapter 2:
dude i was completey thinking about hitch as you said that scene not even kidding
that movie cracks me up so much, its sooo good :]
xD haha shes so drunk shes giggling out of her mind
haha she threw up, and jack thought hed get laid
xDD she just randomly fell asleep haha
and good jack dont rape her gosh xD
aww he stayed even though no sex, so un like jack :]
chapter 3:
POPTARTS! i love those things :]
oh she isnt there anymore and he likes her you can so tell ;]
he walked all through that rain to see her
she moved! :O i knew something bad would happen :[
what she didn't just moved, she died! OHMYGOSH D:
I seriously had a feeling youd end it with I guess I'll go home now
im so phsycic ;]
but ohmygosh i loved this story! even if its sad
it fits remembering sunday pretty damn well!
i have no critique at all:
no spelling or grammar errors, perfect paragraphing
amazing job amanda!
but seriously, this is good.