"Then Kennedy and Pat joined in and we all gained up on John." (Chapter 11) <-- ganged up?
As a general note I'd like to point out that this tour doesn't make sense. It started in Seattle, went to Anaheim, then to Huntington Beach, and now (in chapter 13) it's back in Portland. And now we're back in Seattle (17)
"Blaming it on the bit of cereal I ate this morning I set out to find the nearest porter potty." (Chapter 13) <-- Port-a-potty. It's for "portable potty"
"All of a sudden I heard Death Cab for Cutie’s I Will Follow You Into the Darkness start playing softly." (Still 13) <--- the song is called 'I'll follow you into the dark'
Part 16: GARRETT YOU'RE SO STUPID!
Part 17: DRUNK GARRETT YOU'RE SO STUPID
Part 20: LORRAINE YOU'RE GOING TO GET THEM IN SUCH SHIT! YOU'RE WORSE THAN DRUNK GARRETT!
I'm going to be one of those obnoxious people who lets you know about typos/grammar shit all the time. I always feel really guilty about it, and I thought you should know I'm not trying to be a jerk, I just think everyone could use an extra proofreader. (Chapter 8:) “Anyways,” he said, “the whole reason I came back here was to let you know that we’re to the zoo!”
Hey, I've just started reading and I really like it, I just wanted to let you know in chapter 3: "I remember when I was twelve and I scrapped my arm." <-- scraped?
Awww!! I love this story!! <3 Seems like Garrett really likes Loraine! :)) ... Who would've thought that, huh? ;) lol But I find those two utterly cute! It's the little gestures (the hugs, the smiles, the holding hands and things like that) that makes them so cute and just.. -dreamy sigh- *-* You can't be this! I just found this story and started to love it chapter by chapter:.. You can end the story!! DD: