"Keep your hands off my girl!" "But, I don't like girls!" - Comments

selfdamnation (100)

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love ur story...lmao its pretty awesome gotta update soon k luv ya peace

April 29th, 2008 at 02:08am

xofireatwillox (100)

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Oh wow this is really good. I love how this is turning out...more soon please??

February 27th, 2008 at 03:33am

Icy Blues (150)

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Cool story.
I like how you didn't make it too angsty, but not too funny, either. You struck that balance quite well; same goes with character development. Your dialogue moved along and was believeable, which is normally difficult to accomplish. Nor did you have long pauses or boring events between the important bits to the plot, which I love in a story. :)

All I have to say is to make sure you double space between paragraphs and check your grammar. Also, don't be afraid to expand on a character's thoughts, descriptions of objects, etc. Little things like more descriptions will make it even better. :D

February 19th, 2008 at 01:12am

junioramazon. (150)

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I like it. ^.^
I haven't been able to finish it 'cause I have to go now, but I'm definately going to finsih reading.

~ruthus
xoxox

February 18th, 2008 at 10:56pm

whatsername6353 (100)

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I was reading through some old stories and found this
one.
I think its really good, you should update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

October 8th, 2007 at 12:38am

Scratchet (100)

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MarqueeSexY.:
Are you going to update this or is this the en? Anyway, i think you should update it soon 'couse i love it and have waited for it to be updated for like months... Wah, i love it, really.

Yeah I want to know what happens! We all do! HURRY UP!

October 6th, 2007 at 04:26pm

geraldine. (100)

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Are you going to update this or is this the en? Anyway, i think you should update it soon 'couse i love it and have waited for it to be updated for like months... Wah, i love it, really.

August 9th, 2007 at 11:16pm

The Brightside (500)

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Awwehh =D

Sorry it took me so long to read ... but this is awesome! x]

Thanks for ze notification

June 11th, 2007 at 05:21am

geraldine. (100)

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Update sooon! I like this story :)

June 9th, 2007 at 10:41pm

Pixie Poison (100)

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awesome story....im hooked! PLEASE PM ME WHEN THERE IS MORE

May 20th, 2007 at 04:56am

bleedcry (100)

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this is very hot....billie and gee together that would make a really good porno....jk lol....luv it by the way

April 5th, 2007 at 09:53pm

mike_dirnt_rox (100)

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omg, thats awesome!!!

March 31st, 2007 at 06:02am

Scratchet (100)

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'A flash of impulse ran through Billie's eyes. He pulled me close to him.
"Then come with me..." '
Then Bille Joe kissed me and give me no choice but to go!

THAT'S how the next chapter should go! GERARD YOU GOTTA GO! Wait, what about MCR?! AHH! DONT GO! No......GO!

Ah tell me when more

March 31st, 2007 at 04:17am