Alright, so this fit the song well. I wasn't a huge fan of the layout because of the pictures on the side, but that's just a personal thing x] I could still read everything so it was all good.
I think it would've been a bit better and easier to read if you separated the paragraph a bit so it wasn't just a bit chunk of words, you know?
Like: Her eyes were glazed over as his hand pressed down on hers. "I don't think you're not beautiful. But.." his silence was all she needed to know the rest.
Would be better like: Her eyes were glazed over as his hand pressed down on hers.
I think it would've been a bit better and easier to read if you separated the paragraph a bit so it wasn't just a bit chunk of words, you know?
Like:
Her eyes were glazed over as his hand pressed down on hers. "I don't think you're not beautiful. But.." his silence was all she needed to know the rest.
Would be better like:
Her eyes were glazed over as his hand pressed down on hers.
"I don't think you're not beautiful. But..."
His silence was all she needed to know the rest.
But other than that, good job. (: