Little Room To Bite - Comments

Orignal in my perspective, I've never read a story like this before. It really has you guessing and at first, you're thinking it's going to be a run-of-the-mill crime drama, but towards the end of chap 1, that really puts a twist on things and I like it.
Please commence.

thankyou all for your comments,
i need them.

i've already read this. but i seriously love it.
..
and you, of course.

This is a good story, it's quite an unusual storyline for Mibba, but that's probably a good thing.

Only thing is, the paragraphs aren't quite right.
You should start a new paragraph each time someone different speaks.

What a great start!
Im definately subscribing.
you know what wouldve been cool though, for like the opening scene to be the crime scene. Like from a third person kinda view... Cause you just seem to jump right into the story and a lot of people dont read the summaries.