Happy. - Comments

First of all, I would like to say thank you for entering my contest.

I really liked that you didn't use names within this story. It brought a sense of mystery to the story. I also liked the small, one sentence paragraphs. The thoughts were short, but you separated them perfectly. All of the thoughts came together into a wonderfully happy drabble.

Wonderful job.

*Ahem. That's "contest" above, not "congest." My bad. (And now here I am posting twice. Shameful.) :)

First of all, I'd like to commend you on the fact this told a legitimate story, which is very hard to do in one-hundred words. Like, for real; it was the whole sha-bang. Not only was there the fundamentals (that is, a beginning, middle and end) but there was a lesson and an underlying message to it. And a good one at that. I really liked it, especially since it's one of your first drabbles. So, really, the only criticism I have for you is that you wrote "5" instead of "five." This is a total opinion, so feel no need to change it unless you agree, but I think it looks more poetic and overall more polished if you write the words out. So good job there, love. Thanks for entering my congest. :)