Word Behind My Wall - Comments

I really like the mood of this. As others have pointed out, you did have several errors. I think if you just re-read your work a few times before you post you'll have wonderful work. Keep it up.

I only noticed maybe an error or two, but nothing to make a fuss over in my case. I liked it. It makes me want to sit outside, & just daydream [only if it was warmer out again haha].

Great story. I think I can relate to this, a lot. <3

This was written beautifully. There were quite a few errors however, but nothing to take the reader off of the path this story was taking. GREAT JOB! I LOVE IT! It is kinda sad though, in the fact that this stuff happens every day. But, LOVELY JOB! BRAVO! I like your style of writting!

This was really good, i loved the emotion and realizim in it. And i can relate in some ways which make it all the more better. There is nothing i didn't like in it!

This was really great, and very realistic.
It reminds me of my best friend who is also getting hurt often.
The story was a little hard to read, the colors and then in some parts how it was written.
But I really liked it.
Great job. :)

Sitting in the fields of grass look up toward the sky I could feel the warm air all around me, the wind blowing to the right making the grass lend on me.
This confuses me a lot.
Sitting in the fields of grass, I look up toward the sky. I could feel the warm air all around me, the wind blowing to the right making the grass lean on me.
I think?

The clouds slowly moving along to the point you couldn’t tell if the clouds were moving at all.
The clouds moving so slowing along to the point where you couldn't tell if they were moving at all.

I'm having trouble making sense of this. The sun doesn't go in, it either sets or it rises.

I was never like this I never use to sit in the field all alone.
Comma after this.

Try reading it out loud, if you pause then put a comma there. You have a bit of trouble with this.

I had friends to share this moment with but some how long the years everything started to fade.
along?

I lost friends I build a wall around my world I stop letting friends in .
I lost friends, I built[/n] a wall around my world, I stop letting friends in.

friends faded out tried of being outside
tired.

I keep my world close off from every one
closed off from everyone.

It's a good story, but there are a lot of errors throughout. It's only little things like the few I pointed out that need work, just try re-reading it a couple times. You'll definitely pick them out.
:)

I forgot to comment on your story. D:
Anyway - this is amazing. You did a really good job on detail and emotions.
Very well written.
I like it.

Ooooo! I like it.
I like where you've writen, *At times I feel I'm the only one in the world, who feels the same*
Fav line:)

This was written really well. Except it was a little hard to read because of the contrast of the color of the words and the color of the background. Everything else though, was really good.