Milk - Comments

First off the background is nice and the picture sets the mood easily. Second, I didn't expect it to be so into it once I started reading! Its brillent. Your descriptive language is fantastic! I adore the mood of fear in the story and how you changed to different characters. I hope you continue this. :( Because I'm hooked on it! :D

Wow. Just...wow.
It's so creepy and beautiful at the same time.
You description is impecable. I can see each scene playing out in my head as I read it.
I like how you wrote what's going on with each character, but did it in a way that wasn't confusing.
I'm very interested to see where you take this, and I'll be subscribing so I can do so :)

I can't even honestly say I understand it, but I love it. It's dark and creepy and wonderful. I'm subscribing!

I like the layout picture, but it’s rather large. And that sort of put me off of the story a little. The picture though does fit the story well so far.

This story is unlike anything I’ve read on mibba. But I don’t read much on mibba, it stills seems highly original though. This story really pulled me in more and more the farther I read the chapter. I like to read freakier things, so just the idea of the story was enough to pull me in. The chapter was amazing though. Your writing is very good and your descriptions are excellent. I could easily picture the story in my head as I was reading it.

You did really well on it so far.

I love the banner. It's gorgeous. I must say I found a lot of mistakes throughout my reading.
This story was....weird? I'm not sure what to say xD I kind of feel bad for Ben...er, all of them actually.
So, I like it. It's creative and original. Well done.

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What the actual fuck? This was freaky-deaky. And I loved it! I adore freaky shit that's going to mess with my head later. But seriously, thorns and maggots? Icky. :( But very creative, love. I really don't know what the title has to do with story, but who knows, I may be a retard and didn't get it, though. xD

Anyway, you've sculpted something very creative and absolutely morbid. I LOVE IT. I do hope that this will be a full fledged story. <3

I actually really enjoy this. I think its original and enjoyable to read and I just... like this. I'd prefer if the body of your text was a little smaller but its up to you, I suppose. I'm just not a fan of big text. Your description was nice and I enjoyed how the summary gave everything a little dimension.

I can't say I care for the story title though, I was confused when I saw it, it didn't make much sense. I think a story title has to be something eye-catching or descriptive. Like when you read it in the book [or in this case website] or something to do with it you stop and have an 'oh shit' moment, y'know?

Oh well, this was intriguing, I liked it a lot. :)

The summary, again, is lovely and really intruiges me. I think the banner is lovely. It gives a nice feel to the story. It could be a bit smaller though and the story area should be a little thinner but that's just me. I love the whole concept of this story though and the character's names are sweet. You really do a good job on plotting a good story. I'm not really fond of the story title but whatever. Awesome job overall. <3

Shit, this is awesome.

Wow this is really good cant wait for more!
i was hooked at "best read at night."

my gosh this is amazing !
the writing is so fast paced and works even without much description.
and the layout is amazing :)
i'm so subscribing :D

O.O
A) it's 2 in the afternoon, and I am scared out of my pants. Creepy amazing.
The way Pan talked really made the story awesome for me. I can't wait to read more, I love scaring myself.
It's so dark. My sister ran up to me and scared the hell out of me, actually, I haven't been this spooked in a while.
The layout is fantastic. That drawing fits.
*subscribes* I look forward to more. :D

Love the layout, first of all.
And second, I even love your story more. It really caught me off guard on how brilliant it is. I didn't expect to be drawn in so quickly.

It' well written and presented I think. :)

Also, I hope that you add more details and descriptions to your writing to make it more vivid, in a way. You know? It's already really creative, but just a little more detailing will go a long way.

I like how you've made it dark and haunting; it's really creepy! :) In a good way though. I was getting goosebumps near the end. xD

Anyway, well done! I thoroughly enjoyed this!

I've subscribed, too. :D I can't wait to read more, honestly.

I like the layout, the picture really sets a mood.
:)

I feel like in the first paragraph it should be peculiar instead of particular it would fit better. Particular doesn't really... fit. I like how you say would be, it's different, I like it.. Flowery = floral?

He gestured would have a lowercase on the he.

Barley- barely. It's a common mistake. No thank you would have a comma, she'd say would have lower case on the she'd. Otherwise, this piece was really creepy. The toggle case confused me but other than that, I love horror about dreams, becase you can't escape them. The wide variety of characters confused me but this is just the